Worked solution
### Model Answer Structure and Key Points of Comparison
#### 1. Introduction
* Both Text One ('An Evening at the Border') and Text Two (from *A Passage to Africa*) explore the profound psychological impact of observing human suffering.
* Both authors write from the perspective of an outsider/journalist who is forced to confront the voyeuristic, invasive nature of their presence.
* While Text One focuses on a temporary medical outpost on a border, Text Two focuses on a famine-stricken village in Somalia. Both texts deal with the loss of dignity and the raw emotional shame experienced by the observer.
#### 2. Comparison of Thoughts and Feelings (AO4)
* **Shared sense of shame and intrusion:** In Text One, the writer experiences an "intense, burning shame" when making eye contact with the dying elderly man, realizing his role as a passive observer ("I was observing... comfortable intrusion"). Similarly, in Text Two, Alagiah is deeply unsettled by the smile of a dying man, describing a feeling of "embarrassment" and self-reproach for his privileged position as a reporter.
* **The shock of clinical indifference vs. emotional detachment:** Text One highlights the mechanical, rushed nature of aid ("There was simply no time... no soft words of comfort"), mirroring how Alagiah describes the desensitization of journalists who hunt for the "one image" to shock the audience, treating human tragedy as a commodity.
* **The power of silent connection:** In both texts, a silent look acts as the climax of the piece. In Text One, the old man's look is one of "profound, absolute exposure," which makes the writer's notebook feel like an "absurd, mocking toy." In Text Two, the nameless man's smile humbles Alagiah, forcing him to write about his own reaction and to eventually state, "I owe you one."
#### 3. Comparison of Language and Style (AO3)
* **Sensory Imagery:**
* Text One uses tactile and visual imagery of discomfort: "the wind... scrapes," "fine, grey grit," and "fluorescent and merciless" lighting to establish a bleak, clinical atmosphere.
* Text Two uses stark, visceral, and repellant sensory language ("smell of decaying flesh," "festering wound," "shrivelled elastic") to shock Western readers into witnessing the absolute physical toll of starvation.
* **Metaphors and Symbolism:**
* Text One employs the metaphor of a "splinter in my memory" to illustrate how the encounter permanently lodged itself in the writer's mind. The writer's waterproof "Gore-Tex jacket" and "notebook" symbolize his security and detachment, which are suddenly shattered.
* Text Two uses powerful metaphors of the stage and audience ("ghastly teleshow") to criticize the media's exploitation of suffering, reducing human misery to entertainment.
* **Portrayal of Children:**
* In Text One, the little boy's survival strategy is described as "looking through things rather than at them," capturing his psychological retreat.
* In Text Two, Alagiah describes a child's suffering with clinical and heartbreaking detail, such as the mother who "wiped her sister's forehead with a wet rag," capturing a tragic tenderness.
#### 4. Comparison of Structure (AO3)
* **Spatial and Narrative Zooming:** Both writers use a structural technique of "zooming in" from a general setting to a specific, intense personal encounter.
* Text One starts with the harsh environment of the Kilis border, moves into the temporary medical tent, observes the nurse and a young boy, and finally focuses entirely on the micro-interaction with the elderly man.
* Text Two begins with an introductory hook reflecting on his memories, moves through a gallery of suffering individuals (the woman, the young girl, the old man), and then narrows down to the single smile of the man that changes his entire perspective on journalism.
Marking scheme
### Marking Grid (22 Marks Total)
This question assesses **AO3** (14 marks) and **AO4** (8 marks).
#### AO3: Analyse how writers use linguistic and structural devices to achieve effects (14 marks)
* **Level 5 (12–14 marks):**
* Discriminating, perceptive analysis of linguistic and structural devices.
* Sophisticated understanding of how language and structure create meaning and shape the reader's response.
* Extremely well-selected textual evidence used to support analysis.
* **Level 4 (9–11 marks):**
* Thorough, detailed analysis of linguistic and structural devices.
* Clear, purposeful exploration of how these devices are used to achieve specific effects.
* Relevant and extensive use of textual evidence.
* **Level 3 (6–8 marks):**
* Sound explanation of linguistic and structural features.
* Clear understanding of the effects of these features, though analysis may be more descriptive than evaluative in places.
* Good range of textual references.
* **Level 2 (3–5 marks):**
* Straightforward, simple identification of linguistic and structural features.
* Limited understanding of effects; some descriptive comments.
* Some relevant textual evidence, though may be superficial.
* **Level 1 (1–2 marks):**
* Basic, repetitive, or minimal identification of language/structural features.
* No real understanding of how these devices achieve effects.
* Minimal or no textual evidence.
#### AO4: Explore links and connections between writers' ideas and perspectives (8 marks)
* **Level 5 (8 marks):**
* Perceptive and cohesive comparison of ideas and perspectives across both texts.
* Synthesis of the texts is seamlessly integrated throughout the essay.
* **Level 4 (6–7 marks):**
* Detailed, clear comparison of ideas and perspectives across both texts.
* Strong comparative links are sustained and well-developed.
* **Level 3 (4–5 marks):**
* Sound, clear comparison of ideas and perspectives.
* Connections are made explicitly, though some points may be treated in isolation.
* **Level 2 (2–3 marks):**
* Straightforward, simple comparison of ideas or perspectives.
* Connections are basic, or the candidate may write largely about one text and then the other with minimal integration.
* **Level 1 (1 mark):**
* Very basic comparison of obvious points, or treats texts entirely separately with no clear links.
#### Accept/Reject Guidelines:
* **Accept:** Balanced comparisons that address both texts and focus on the prompts (language, structure, thoughts, and feelings). Accept range of interpretations of the writers' feelings (e.g., guilt, detachment, professionalism vs. personal connection).
* **Reject:** Essays that focus entirely on one text to the exclusion of the other (cannot achieve above Level 2 for AO4).